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南京朗閣是南京排名前列,優秀的教學出國語言培訓中心.雄厚的師資力量,良好的教學環境.專業雅思,托福,SAT,GRE,GMAT教學15年.熱線:025-83236520! 雅思寫作要求考生寫出一篇符合要求的文章，如果想寫好，需要我們增強自身的寫作能力，好作文首先的表現就是句子要連貫通順，句與句之間的銜接要合理，不能給人以生搬硬套的感覺，為了達到這個目的，我們應該多做努力。 達到句子通順這個雅思寫作要求需要我們學會運用一些連接詞，請通過下面的范文來了解一下連接詞的作用： 題目：Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. A problem of modern societies is the declining level of health in the general population, with conflicting views on how to tackle this worrying trend. 通過代詞this的使用使得“現象”與大眾對現象的看法產生了銜接，清晰簡潔，不留痕跡做到了評分準則中的“uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention” One possible solution is to provide more sports facilities to encourage a more lifestyle. 通過 “one possible”寫出了后文還會提到提到其他的解決方案，從而體現了后文在分段和內容上與總觀點的對應，即評分準則中的”skilfully manages paragraphing“ Advocates of this believe that today’s sedentary lifestyle and stressful working 通過this的使用把主體段與“首段”緊密聯系起來 conditions mean that physical activity is no longer part of either our work or our leisure time. If there were easy-to-reach local sports centres, we would be more 通過對于關鍵詞的修飾進一步論證了論點中涉及的關鍵重心內容，體現了內容的深化，論據與觀點的銜接(即增多“sports facilities”的個原因：需要讓大眾方便做運動) likely to make exercise a regular part of our lives, rather than just collapsing in front of a screen every evening. The variety of sports that could be offered would 作用同上“通過對于關鍵詞的修飾進一步論證了論點中涉及的關鍵重心內容，體現了內容的深化，論據與觀點的銜接”(即增多“sports facilities”的第二個原因：需要滿足多人的需求)，兩個原因之間并沒有生硬的使用“Firstly, Secondly” cater for all ages, levels of fitness and interests: those with painful memories of PE at school might be happier in the swimming pool than on the football pitch. However, there may be better ways of tackling this problem. Interest in sport is 通過代詞”this ”的使用，是的此段觀點與題目相聯系(即在此段會寫出“other possible ways”),并且與上一段形成并列關系 not universal, and additional facilities might simply attract the already fit, not those who most need them. Physical activity could be encouraged relatively cheaply, for example by installing exercise equipment in parks, as my local council has done. This has the added benefit that parents and children often use them “This”代替前面的措施，前后句之間因此產生緊密聯系 together just for fun, which develops a positive attitude to exercise at an early age. “which”代替前面所描述的“增加equipment”的直接影響，使主句和從句，直接影響和間接影響產生聯系 As well as physical activity, high tax penalties could be imposed on high-fat food products, tobacco and alcohol, as excessive consumption of any of these (普通連接詞“as”后接原因) (“these”代詞的使用加強主從句之間的聯系) contributes to poor health. Even improving public transport would help: it takes longer to walk to the bus stop than to the car. In my opinion, focusing on sports facilities is too narrow an approach and would not have the desired results. People should be encouraged not only to be more physically active but also to adopt a healthier lifestyle in general. 通過以上的分析可以看出，考官是極少使用明顯生硬的連接詞的，而是通過緊扣論點的論據分類，代詞的準確應用以及論點與分論點的內容呼應達到“不留痕跡，分段得體”的狀態的。同學們要做到“連貫與銜接”的完美展現，建議大家掌握 “代詞”的靈活應用和內容的彼此聯系才是真諦。 (責任編輯：admin) |
